Date: October 16, 2011 05:32 pm Title: Counting Down to Zero
I do so wish this could have been a canon on screen episode arch. We did need to have some input into the workings of the minds of our crew, and this one is beautifully done.
I especially like the way you propose Trip's being the one senior officer keeping the crew held together. Very good point, with Archer being deeply into the mission, and T'pol being affected by the addiction. Excellent call!
i look forward to reading your newest submissions!
Date: December 26, 2010 12:56 am Title: Counting Down to Zero
This is a rather sad story, but one of my favorites. I always felt it didn't get the attention it deserves. The story is from T'Pols point of view, but for me it's Trip in all his actions and the way you write him that I liked so much. You also make me like Phlox better - he is acting like a good doctor and friend should. And T'Pol... so full of guilt and confusion. I always see T'Pol as a woman with a strong moral code and some one who is very strict to herself when she thinks she has crossed the line of her code. Like in this story. I liked the ending to - it seems so abrupt, but it fits the story. I would like a sequel, but the story is perfect as stand alone.
Thanks! I'm actually quite proud of this one myself. Its always fun getting into T'Pol's headspace.
I'm very pleased that you liked Phlox in this. As former military, I had a lot of problems with what he did and why.
As to the sequel, well, that's "Zero Hour." Complete with alien Nazis...
Date: December 18, 2010 10:17 am Title: Counting Down to Zero
I absolutely love this, Rigil.
It's kind of funny how both Trip and T'Pol can be at once so selfish and selfless. There are many times in the show when one pulls back in an effort to let the other do what he or she needs to do, to not force something on them...but at the same time it's the other person who suffers for not knowing the feelings are mutual. And here it is again, T'Pol's willing to take her licks by telling Trip, but she just doesn't want to burden him with one more thing on his plate.
Something tells me, though, he'd be more upset that she waited so long to tell him, than he would be over what she did.
This was wonderful, Rigil.
Thank you kindly. I tend to agree with you wholeheartedly - they're both selfless & selfish at the same time. Neither one of them is especially good at communication, especially when its to say what they want. Honestly, they need a mental bond to get past this silliness.
As to Trip being upset that she waited so long to tell him about the trellium, I personally believe that's one of the reasons he was so pissy toward her in the Demons/Terra Prime story - he'd just found out about the trellium and was alternately confused and furious.
Glad you enjoyed it!
Date: December 05, 2010 01:53 am Title: Counting Down to Zero
This is a necessary scene addition. I never bought T'Pol's quick miracle cure from her addiction. This story is very believable. T'Pol probably could (mostly) hold it together in front of other people, but behind the scenes be suffering psychological withdrawal.
It was also a great story for Phlox. I was bothered by the way he gave T'Pol her little miracle cure and then let her go on her way without letting anyone know how deeply her emotional control had been damaged. Having Phlox keep tabs on T'Pol's movements makes much more sense. I like this Phlox you've written for us.
My favorite parts, though, are where you explore the paradox of the very emotional Trip being so in control of his emotions. That's how I've always seen him. Outwardly he is very expressive, but I think he actually keeps himself very tightly controlled. These are two of my favorite lines:
"'I'm sorry,' she said softly, once more finding it impossible to meet his eyes. He exhaled loudly, and his aggression melted away. She envied his easy mastery of emotion."
"It was ironic, she thought bitterly, that the same emotions she was now struggling to contain had seemed less intense only an hour earlier. Only in the presence of the most emotional man she had ever known did T'Pol feel fully in control of herself."
To me, these lines explain why TnT work. Outwardly opposite, they actually have so much in common, and they complete each other.
Finally, one thing I've always admired about your writing is how you write Trip. Your Trip is a strong, capable man. I can't tell you how much I love this description of him:
"On the heels of that thought, however, T'Pol realized that it would be unfair to put even more burdens on him. With the captain retreating from everyone emotionally and her own out-of-character actions of late, Commander Tucker currently had enough problems to deal with, particularly since everyone aboard looked to him for guidance and leadership whether he realized it or not. It hadn't escaped her notice that, despite his own personal troubles, he remained the one person aboard Enterprise who seemed fully capable of holding the crew together."
From the beginning of the series, that's been true of Trip! He did have a lot of growing up to do as far as being able to be command of the crew, but from the start his natural leadership abilities were there. Trip has always been the glue that holds the crew together.
Thank you! I really wanted to show a more realistic take on the (unnecessary) trellium addiction, and wanted to redeem Phlox a little bit in my own eyes. It REALLY bothered me that he just kept his mouth shut the way he did - yeah, they're in a crap place, but leaving T'Pol in command while she's recovering from an addiction to mind-altering substances is just criminally negligent, so the idea of him discreetly keeping an eye on her (and certain key locations as well) really worked for me.
I'm quite pleased you liked my take on Trip. Needless to say, he's my favorite character on the show, so showing him be the strong one here was intended to sort of bookend their relationship - she was the strong one when he broke down in "The Forgotten," now it is his turn.
As to the final comment, I've always see him as holding the crew together. Malcolm and T'Pol, for example, have absolutely nothing in common but their friendship (or more) with Trip, and so on. It was one of the reasons TATV pissed me off so much - Chef was not the ship's counsellor, Trip was. I find it improbable that the crew would really stay tight with one another if he passed. But that's JMHO...
Date: December 04, 2010 07:13 am Title: Counting Down to Zero
I like how you describe T'Pol's mannerisms and how they reflect her mood (pacing...yeah, she probably subconsciously picked that up from Archer...) and her relationship w/Trip. Interesting that she described him as the one person who was holding the crew together, whether he was aware of it or not...and that's actually true.
Her struggled against her trellium addiction is a lot more realistic, especially the 'just a look'. It's a slippery road.
Thanks! While I personally thought the whole trellium addiction to be both contrived and unnecessary, I was really frustrated that there really weren't any ramifications of T'Pol's actions or even any real indication that she was struggling with the addiction. One of the reasons I don't smoke and only drink very rarely is because there's a long history of addiction in my family, so I know it's really hard to break. Thus, I wanted to show at least a hint of that sort of struggle.
Plus? The bond is clearly manifesting whether she's aware of it or not. :)