Date: September 03, 2012 06:35 pm Title: Archer's Lament
Deeply poignant. Jon was so badly damaged by the Expanse I doubt he would ever fully recover from it, and your poem reflects that very painfully. He doesn't grudge the cost, but he can't ratlionalize the guilt he feels. Very human, very natural, and very, very sad.
Date: October 10, 2011 09:43 am Title: Archer's Lament
Very well done, depicting Archer's decent into the tortured soul that emerged from the Expanse. Would he return to the light....that is kept a question in your poem. Love it!
Thank you for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
The way I see it is that Archer will always have the tortured soul. He was forged by fire in the Expanse and that has changed him irreparably but it doesn't mean he doesn't still carry that internal compass. I think, though, that Archer also pushes emotions deep (sometimes to his detriment) Many of his greatest acheivements are ahead of him (per the bio screen in 'In a Mirror Darkly") and thus, I think he's able to compartmentalize that torture...it never leaves but he's found a way to live with it.
Date: December 01, 2010 04:25 pm Title: Archer's Lament
This is how a poem should be: a world full of emotions, set in a few lines. Great work. Really liked the last line.
Thank you for your review. I'm glad I was able to capture the angst Archer felt. While he eventually would learn to live with his choices (I don't think he'd ever fully forgive himself), at the time of Home, I truly think this is how he felt.
Date: December 01, 2010 03:11 pm Title: Archer's Lament
Oh, poor Jon! Short and simple, yet so poignant about his guilt and grief...they definitely show through in the words!
Thank you for your review. I'm glad the words conveyed the story well. His experience in the Expanse definitely pushed him to the limit.