Date: June 06, 2013 09:37 pm Title: Chapter 13: Phlox: Death of a spy
Blond woman, blue eyes, telepathic? That sounds suspiciously like Rajiin. Nice mystery you have going on.
A little nitpick though. Was this chapter beta-read? I noticed a couple wrong words (extension instead od extinction and interrupted instead of interpreted). It's nothing major, but it is a wee bit interruptive to the flow of reading.
Now who would that blond woman be? Thanks for the review, Kotik. The chapter was beta-read, I will have a look at the words you mentioned.
Date: June 06, 2013 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 12: Phlox: Little Trojan horses
ooh, the plot thickens. Nasty nannites and even nastier radiation. A true science fiction tale :)
I like that Phlox gets so much attention in your story.
Thanks, Kotik. I wanted to give Phlox a little more depth and emotions than we usual see of him.
Date: May 15, 2013 05:27 pm Title: Prologue
This sets a very dark tone for the story to come. I read it sometimes years ago, but since it is the prequel to World Of Ice, I reckoned a refresher was in order.
Those guards are scary and strike me as being in need of the odd logic refresher themselves. They appear to have a bit of an anger management problem.
Thanks Kotik. Don't worry, the rest of the story is less dark. But the events in prison do have a effect on T'Pol and also on Trip. They also going to solve a mystery, but please read on to know more. ;)