Date: December 06, 2012 04:21 pm Title: Fly Me to the Moon
Nice. You really did a good job of weaving the emotional vibe of the song titles/chapter titles into the feeling of each chapter, making them unique, yet cohesive to the whole story.
I do love that you ended on a positive note. I'm a sucker for happy endings. :)
Date: December 06, 2012 11:10 am Title: Looking For a Reason
I'm hoping Trip talks Malcolm out of transferring. That Malcolm is even considering leaving shows how much the Expanse affected everyone.
The previous chapter was well done in showing how much these two men were hurting; this chapter was excellently done showing how they are trying to heal.
Date: December 06, 2012 10:53 am Title: Ain't Nobody
Ow. You made me really feel for Malcolm in this piece. First, he's so wrapped up in regret for what he's doing, then losing Hoshi. And of course the realization about a use for the transporter that he hadn't thought of.
The last paragraph was very powerful.
Date: November 11, 2012 09:17 pm Title: Ain't Nobody
Oh yes, this triangle is one of the most heartrending, as they all three have so much need yet find it so hard to ask for it to be filled. You have written this so very well, bring the sweet angst right to our seeking souls!
Thank you! I had worried I didn't really make the triangle aspect obvious enough.
Date: November 09, 2012 06:01 pm Title: Save a Prayer
I didn't get the title of this story until I started this chapter. Clever, indeed!
Again, a little bittersweet, but it seems right. Hoshi's jumpiiness is certainly understandable, and Malcolm wanting to help is in line with his protectiveness. The whole story seems very natural and unforced.
I feel a little sad for them that their relationship might not go any further.
Don't worry, it's a Valentine's Day fic, and Valentine's Day fics aren't supposed to end sadly. I will not spoil beyond that statement though. :)
The title actually comes from a conversation between Christopher Pike and Phil Boyce in D.C. Fontana's TOS book, Vulcan's Glory. It's a reference to Pike's potential relationship with Number One, but the sentiment is also a perfect fit for Malcolm & Hoshi. I'm glad you liked the idea!
Date: November 09, 2012 05:55 pm Title: Shut Your Eyes
I can see Hoshi and Malcolm needing each other to get through this, in light of episode. Well done!
But before I go read the next chapter, I have to say that you really set the tone -- the uncertainty, the wondering when they would quit dreaming about Urquat -- very convincingly. I really feel for what they are going through.
Date: November 09, 2012 02:55 pm Title: Shut Your Eyes
I love the way you write - it flows so very well. It did take me a moment to remember that Urquat and the Loque’eque were part of the epsiode "Extinction", it'd been so long since I'd watched that one. I do like the fact that the dreams haven't gone away quite yet.
My favorite moment here is the hand holding between Hoshi and Malcolm. In-character, akward, full of lots of things left unsaid. Very nicely done.
Also - nice way to weave the song lyrics into this chapter!