Date: November 09, 2012 11:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was very moving. Somehow it seems that Malcolm would be the last. His walk through the ship, in particular his old quarters, was very poignant and bittersweet. I think this is one of the better character death stories I've read.
I'm impressed, too, that you were able to let Malcolm's sometimes dry sense of humor come through without overdoing it. I loved this line: They didn’t call him The Adder back in the Academy as a tribute to his mathematical skills. It made me smile even though I was pretty sure what was coming.
I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and thank you for taking the time and trouble to comment!
Date: October 13, 2012 01:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
This brought tears to my eyes (and since I'm in the midst of applying eye makeup, that's not good - ha, ha). It's so beautiful and sad. To me Malcolm was always the hardest character to understand, but you capture him so well.
I particularly liked this line: "They’d gone out there with a hand extended in friendship and nearly had it torn off for good." - I think that sums their experience up really well. Yet at the same time, even though it's sad and you detail a lot of the horror the crew encountered, the story doesn't feel hopeless because you included so many little moments of joy like the picture in Malcom's quarters and the bourbon from the wedding.
Thank you so much!
I was extremely anxious about posting this story in case it got a bad reaction, so I'm really pleased you enjoyed it.