Date: February 18, 2012 07:46 am Title: Chapter 1
This is wonderful! The form serves the content well. Jon’s thoughts feel like impressions – albeit deep impressions – from the interview with Malcolm as he tries to sort out what just happened.
I especially like the parallel sets of observations for – ‘who you are’ and ‘who I am’. It’s such an accurate picture of Malcolm, shields again in place after what must have been a shared moment of what-ifs. And the whole impact on Jon is captured as ‘who I am remains, undone.’