Date: September 13, 2011 09:27 am Title: Chapter 1
I like your character voices in this, and their interactions. I could totally see this happening in the AU where TV networks aren't terrified of gay people.
Thanks so much for your feedback! It's good to hear that I've caught the voices and the situations feel right.
Date: September 10, 2011 07:39 am Title: Chapter 1
You captured the personalities of these characters very well. In my mind I could hear your dialogue coming from the characters and picture their reactions. In particular, the scene where Malcolm confronts Jon in his ready room about the need to get things out in the open really struck me as spot on.
Thanks so much! It's always great to hear that the characters sound real to other people, not just in my head. Yes, that scene with Malcolm and Jon was so painful for Malcolm (and probably as uncomfortable, justly so, for Jon).