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Reviewer: Mistress Euclid Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2011 01:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

You do romance like no one else. This is just a beautiful, sweet and romantic story. Brava!

Reviewer: EntAllat Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30, 2011 04:09 pm Title: Chapter 1

So cute! Archer a "grandfather" of sorts, lol!

I like that you didn't force the song's lyrics into the actual story or dialog here. Insterspersing them through the story made it feel more like a soundtrack to the scene - very nice!

I know this is a fluffy Valentine's Day piece, so the focus is on the romance but I wanted to comment that I loved the brief moment between the boy and Malcolm. It was understated but still very effective: Malcolm's quick reflexes, a nice reminder of his background and personality, and a great way to paint the harbor environment.

Reviewer: bluetiger Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06, 2011 06:15 am Title: Chapter 1

Talk about giving you the warm fuzzies. I think that may have been the perfect proposal. Things went just the way Malcolm wanted and we got a glimpse of what all the other characters were up too. So romantic, I just love it.

Reviewer: asearcher Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02, 2011 05:18 pm Title: Chapter 1

Very nice story.  Hoshi and Malcolm make a cute couple.



Author's Response:

Yeah, they do, don't they? :-D

Reviewer: Kathy Rose Signed [Report This]
Date: March 01, 2011 10:28 am Title: Chapter 1

That was so sweet, Lady Rainbow. And your descriptions were excellent! One thing I really liked was that, although you used other languages, they didn't feel intrusive or obstruct the flow of the story, which sometimes happens when other languages are inserted.

I had to laugh at Malcolm's thoughts about Trip giving him fashion advice! And then Malcolm's reaction to Hoshi's outfit -- woo-hoo!

 



Author's Response:

Thank you, Kathy!

Yeah, leave it to Trip to give all sorts of "helpful" advice. XD

Reviewer: panyasan Signed [Report This]
Date: March 01, 2011 07:31 am Title: Chapter 1

I really enjoy this story. The song lyrics and the story flowed very well together. I loved the Manderin and Malay (tone languages - I salute any one who can master them). The use of the languages added such a nice flavour to the whole story.Well done.



Author's Response:

Thank you!

I'm currently learning Mandarin, but I can't claim mastery in Malay. LOL! I had a friend from Charlotte's International House double check it. I became cross eyed as I tried to figure out what she was saying. XD

Reviewer: Misplaced Signed [Report This]
Date: February 28, 2011 09:27 am Title: Chapter 1

Awwwww! So sweet!  Bravo!



Author's Response:

Thank you! :-D

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