Date: December 06, 2012 10:21 pm Title: Local Attractions
Nice. You really did a good job of weaving the emotional vibe of the song titles/chapter titles into the feeling of each chapter, making them unique, yet cohesive to the whole story.
I do love that you ended on a positive note. I'm a sucker for happy endings. :)
Date: December 06, 2012 05:10 pm Title: Local Attractions
I'm hoping Trip talks Malcolm out of transferring. That Malcolm is even considering leaving shows how much the Expanse affected everyone.
The previous chapter was well done in showing how much these two men were hurting; this chapter was excellently done showing how they are trying to heal.
Date: December 06, 2012 04:53 pm Title: Local Attractions
Ow. You made me really feel for Malcolm in this piece. First, he's so wrapped up in regret for what he's doing, then losing Hoshi. And of course the realization about a use for the transporter that he hadn't thought of.
The last paragraph was very powerful.
Date: November 12, 2012 03:17 am Title: Local Attractions
Oh yes, this triangle is one of the most heartrending, as they all three have so much need yet find it so hard to ask for it to be filled. You have written this so very well, bring the sweet angst right to our seeking souls!
Thank you! I had worried I didn't really make the triangle aspect obvious enough.
Date: November 10, 2012 12:01 am Title: Local Attractions
I didn't get the title of this story until I started this chapter. Clever, indeed!
Again, a little bittersweet, but it seems right. Hoshi's jumpiiness is certainly understandable, and Malcolm wanting to help is in line with his protectiveness. The whole story seems very natural and unforced.
I feel a little sad for them that their relationship might not go any further.
Don't worry, it's a Valentine's Day fic, and Valentine's Day fics aren't supposed to end sadly. I will not spoil beyond that statement though. :)
The title actually comes from a conversation between Christopher Pike and Phil Boyce in D.C. Fontana's TOS book, Vulcan's Glory. It's a reference to Pike's potential relationship with Number One, but the sentiment is also a perfect fit for Malcolm & Hoshi. I'm glad you liked the idea!
Date: November 09, 2012 11:55 pm Title: Local Attractions
I can see Hoshi and Malcolm needing each other to get through this, in light of episode. Well done!
But before I go read the next chapter, I have to say that you really set the tone -- the uncertainty, the wondering when they would quit dreaming about Urquat -- very convincingly. I really feel for what they are going through.
Date: November 09, 2012 08:55 pm Title: Local Attractions
I love the way you write - it flows so very well. It did take me a moment to remember that Urquat and the Loque’eque were part of the epsiode "Extinction", it'd been so long since I'd watched that one. I do like the fact that the dreams haven't gone away quite yet.
My favorite moment here is the hand holding between Hoshi and Malcolm. In-character, akward, full of lots of things left unsaid. Very nicely done.
Also - nice way to weave the song lyrics into this chapter!
Date: November 03, 2012 12:44 am Title: Prisoners of Hope
I finally finished my story, which meant I can read this one now. And I loved it! It was nice to see Malcolm's interior thoughtscape while going through the crucible of "Zero Hour," and how they realized what was right there in front of them the whole time.
Great job. Thank you!
Date: September 15, 2012 05:28 pm Title: Shy That Way
Yay! I think this is the first time I've ever guessed the surprise -you gave it away a little bit with Hoshi blocking the doorway to her cabin. There was bound to be somebody in there, and given your plotline it was always going to be the cap'n!
Still, it was a charming story, and stuck beautifully to their characters. I've always suspected that T'Pol could be fairly ruthless when it comes to logic v regulations, and this is a plausible departure from the latter for the ultimate good of the crew.
A thoroughly enjoyable read! Thank you!
Thanks for taking the time to review! It was going to be fairly obvious who Hoshi had with her given that it was me writing this. ;)
I was surprised to find that the story was just as much about Trip and T'Pol's relationship as it was about Hoshi and Jon's. It's funny how that works out!
Date: September 02, 2012 03:42 pm Title: True Love Travels on a Gravel Road
This was the perfect end to your story. I loved the last paragraph. It tied left both Trip and T'Pol comfortable with other and with the world around them.
T'Pol couldn't have picked a better way for Trip to get away from it all after his debriefing. I think all the cloak and dagger stuff would have really appealed to him. And true to her nature, T'Pol really had it all planned out perfectly.
I thought it was hilarious that the ministers in Las Vegas were called an Elvis. This proves without a doubt that T'Pol definitely loves her husband. I can't imagine that many Vulcan women would do this for the man in their life. I think this chapter shows just how well matched Trip and T'Pol really are.
Thank for a terrific story! I look forward to reading lots more from you.
Thank you! I wanted Trip and T'Pol to have some quality time alone and showing how much their relationship had developed. Thank your for your kind words.
Date: September 01, 2012 07:23 pm Title: True Love Travels on a Gravel Road
Very nice! I like the jouney/road theme than runs throughout this chapter. It is one of the most important -- if not the most important -- journeys Trip and T'Pol will have to make in their lives. There are certainly many peaks and valleys. This chapter starts out on such an upbeat note with the trip to Vulcan. Excellent descriptions, by the way. Then T'Pol married Koss and everything changed.
I can't blame Trip for leaving Enterprise. Sometimes it really is best to walk away. Why should Trip punish himself if he honestly believes T'Pol will never care for him.
It's rather telling that they do their best communicating in their white space, a place Trip doesn't believe is anything more than a dream. They finally revealed all the misunderstandings and hurt feelings. The problem, of course, is that neither of them would acknowledge these feelings in the cold light of day.
I agree with you that T'Pol was the one who had to make the first move to bring them back together. Trip had been hurt to many times. Regardless of what she said to him in the white space, he had to hear her tell him out loud.
Thank you for a wonderful chapter! It was very well done!
Thank you for your kind words! This chapter has been kind of a struggle and I am very glad you enjoyed it.
Date: August 28, 2012 05:27 am Title: Brush
I read this when you first posted it, and I can't believe that I didn't leave a review!
Anyways, you know my penchant for these two, so this soothes my Jon and Trip little heart! It was funny, tense, and sensually beautiful!
Thank you, Kylah, for writing this. *nudges for more*
Date: August 08, 2012 09:33 pm Title: True Love Travels on a Gravel Road
What a nice ending! I liked how you took the story full-circle, back to Trip in the car in the desert - only this time T'Pol is truly his. Here's my favorite part: T’Pol sounded intrigued. “So this Elvis sings at the wedding ceremony? Just like the Vulcan priest did at ours?” So funny!!!
Thank you so much for your reviews, Brandyjane. I am glad you liked the ending - back to Trip and T'Pol in the desert. I always love to have Vulcans comment on things that seem normal to use. I was happy to hear you thought it was funny. Thanks!
Date: August 06, 2012 01:31 am Title: True Love Travels on a Gravel Road
Awwwwwwww. How lovely. This is such a contrast to the previous chapter. There Trip and T'Pol were strangers; here they're obviously the best of friends. Nice!
It's understandable that T'Pol would be concerned about what happened while she was under the influence of the some alien microbe. But Phlox was discreet and Trip was understanding. She certainly is fortunate to have so many caring men in her life.
The ending was just perfect. "Sweet dreams, T'Pol" says it all. Her relationship with Trip has a solid foundation of friendship which is much better in the long run that mere physical attraction.
Glad you liked it! This chapter is a contrast to the last one, but that chapter shows why Trip is enjoying their renewed friendship so much. I always wondered what T'Pol maybe feeling after she realized she has been acting out of control and not knowning exactly what happened. Like you said, it would be understandable that she would be concerned and glad to find out the truth. Showing the depths of their friendship was the goal of this chapter and I am glad you thought that was clear. Thanks for the review!
Date: August 04, 2012 05:45 pm Title: True Love Travels on a Gravel Road
Wow! There sure is a lot to like in this chapter. I especially like the ramifications that came about because of T'Pol's secret mission with Archer. I think Trip was right to be upset about it; he shouldn't have been left totally in the dark. It's sad to think that his relationship with T'Pol is irreparable, though.
They're both obviously unhappy.I think Hoshi, the body language guru, picked that up from both of them, which is probably why she invited herself to breakfast with Trip. It should have occurred to him that if Hoshi can read T'Pol she could read him too. He's not fooling anybody, except possibly himself. His dreams ought to be a big tip off for him, but I think he's in denial. As you said: "The old friendship and trust were gone." He probably decided subconsciously to give up wishing for what he couldn't have. Silly man. As for T'Pol, there's the old adage, after you get what you want you don't want it. She obviously misses Trip.
You did a very nice job explaining the growing rift in the relationship between Trip and T'Pol. As for Hoshi, she's the perfect person to open other people's eyes to the truth.
Excellent chapter! And VERY well written. Bravo!
Thanks, Dinah. Glad you liked it and thought it was well written. I liked your insights that both Trip and T'Pol are unhappy with their current situaion, but neither of them wants to admit it. Thank you so much for your review.
Date: August 04, 2012 02:46 pm Title: True Love Travels on a Gravel Road
I really liked getting inside of Trip's head in chapter three. I think you really captured what was going on between them.
It was a real challenge to write this from Trip's POV. Glad you liked it! Thanks you for the review.
Date: July 28, 2012 07:15 pm Title: True Love Travels on a Gravel Road
If this dream is any indication, seeing T'Pol in the decon chamber had a major impact on Trip. The pretty, intelligent lady in the green floral print dress is rather aloof, but at the diner, Trip catches a glimpse of the emotions that lie just beneath the surface. It's too bad that the alarm went off when it did. Given the look in T'Pol's eyes, things could have gotten very interesting, very fast.
This is a TERRIFIC way to begin a story! I'm looking forward to reading more.
Thank you so much! I liked your observation about the dream lady being aloof, but with emotions just beneath the surface. Isn't T'Pol the same. Hope you will enjoy the rest of the story.