Date: December 31, 2011 06:46 am Title: Chapter 2
So sad, T'Pol's situation is difficult. Interesting way you have brought out the latent feeling Trip and Jon have for each other. That's' creative !
i love how Phlox is there for all of them in this time.
Thank you, Tish! Yes, it's very difficult for them. It was a challenge to work my way through that because I didn't want to go to melodramatic. I hope I've achieved that.
Date: December 30, 2011 11:39 pm Title: Chapter 2
How beautiful and sad at the same time! And sexy! Wow. You have very quickly established how coupled-up Jon and Trip are. It's going to get messy, and I know it a good way. Terrific work.
Thank you! Yes, that was my main aim, to show how into each other they really are! I do loves me some Trip and Archer! Of course, most people know that! :)
Date: December 30, 2011 01:58 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow!! Delicious. And I like the way dream and reality were juxtaposed as Archer was waking up. You really went all out on this one, pauline -- above and beyond. Thank you!
Unfortunately, Honeybee is enjoying torturing me and making me (and everyone else) wait until tomorrow for the next chapter! DRAT! This is certainly an exercise in discipline for me, since it's taking everything I've got not to go into the admin panel and take a peek!!
You're welcome, it has been my please, and Thank you!
Ooo... that was one of the areas I was really uncertain about, with going into the 1st person POV then juxtaposing Phlox in there. I'm glad, and releived, that it worked!
Date: December 30, 2011 01:44 pm Title: Chapter 2
My My! That is quite a "memory" scene there. No wonder our boys are so attached to each other. Great job. And I really like Phlox's engagement in the situation, very professional and in character.
Thank you, Honeybee! I really wanted to get across how close Jon and Trip became while they were missing, and I'm glad I was able to get Pholx right!